▶ Your Answer :
Without doubt, conserving environment plays
a significant role in people’s daily lives in many of the places where they
work or play. Some people think that trial to conserve the environment will not
help it is improved in the future, while others do not. If I were asked to choose
one, I would say that we can improve environment near future. There are several
reasons as follows.
To begin with, because the government tries try
to promote public transmit, it can prevent climate change. A provision of more convenient
and cheaper transportation encourages people to commute by bus or subway
instead of their individual cars. Less usage of their cars is likely to prevent
emission of harmful gas from cars which change climate pattern. For example,
recently in the United States, Texas suffers from unexpected massive flooding
leading property damage and thousands of deaths. This is a very rare phenomenon
in the state known for its dry weather. Many experts connect this event to
increase in CO2 mainly caused by driving cars based on the fact that the number
of cars are increasing tremendously. It is not exaggerating that cars are main
reasons of destroying the environment. After this experience, the government
acknowledged the need for carefully policies. Since the government implements
more sustainable policies and individuals actively participate in them, this
joint effort can reduce gas emission as well as natural disasters.
In addition, the environment will be better
because many people try to use alternative energy sources instead of traditional
fuels. Fossil fuels are limited in supply and sensibility of price fluctuation.
The government and individual who are well-aware of such dangers is likely to
participate and invest to development of new energy sources. For instance, the
UK government is boosting incentives such as more subsidies, exemption of
congestion charges and tax benefits to encourage people to purchase electric
hybrid cars. The government is also promising to expand solar battery
recharging station to electric cars in London. To take advantage of these
benefits, many of its citizens are affirming their support to purchase electric
cars. As a result, the sales of electric cars have been increasing continuously
every year. Many other countries that acknowledge the merits of this approach are
applying it to their own countries to cooperate on a global level.
All things considered, the environment will be safe
because the government and individuals try to preserve it. All in all, this
effort will be continuous and pass down to next generation.
Good (24–30)
서론 -If I were to asked to choose one 구문 입니다.
첫번째 본문 -수 일치. government 단수 이므로 try-->tries -수 일치. suffers -명사 앞에 관사
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