▶ Your Answer :
Some people might say that it is not necessary to listen to other's
opinions. However, in my opinion, taking criticism from others is important to
succeed in a group project. There are two reasons. First, something can be
learned from criticism from others. Second, you can prevent the
conflicts among the group members.
To begin with, you might feel bad when you get negative feedbacks. But
these feedbacks let you learn things that you did not know about. For example,
a survey was conducted by a group of education majors with 200 students as
respondents. The purpose of the survey was to understand their thoughts about
taking criticism from others. The majority of respondents
replied that even though they felt bad and frustrated
right after they got criticism, they felt so bad and frustrating, this
criticism actually helped them improve their social and academic abilities. They also added
that through listening to others, they found out their drawbacks that they had
not known before. This survey proves that taking
criticism is crucial in that people can fix their shortages.
On top of that, there are billions of people living in different cities
and countries around the world. They all have different personalities, experiences and points of views. So conflicts are
always exist where many people gather. In this complex world, taking criticism
is crucial for everyone. For example, I will talk about myself and my friend to
elucidate my point. When it comes to criticism, I just accept all the negative
things about me and struggle to fix them. On the contrary, my friend always complaint
complained and ignored
it whenever she got criticism from others. She
does not even tries try to change it in
good ways. Whenever our class needs to
form groups in classes in order to do an assignment, other classmates do
not want to be a member of the group where my friend belongs to because there
is always a quarrel with the members.
To sum up, accepting
negative feedbacks is actually beneficial for everyone themselves. Also,
there it might be less likely to have a
conflict with one another. In this regard, I firmly believe that people should
be able to take criticism from other members in order to succeed in a group
project.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Good (24-30) |
Score |
26 |
Overall
Comment: |
좋습니다. 요지를 잘 잡으셨고
예시도 설득력이 있었어요. 템플릿을 사용하지 않고도 매끄럽게 잘 쓰신 점이 좋았습니다. 다만 문법 오류가 좀 있어서 감점을 드렸으니 위
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