▶ Your Answer :
Various opinions may exist over the argument whether it is better to solve
problems by gaining advice from others than using one's own experience or
knowledge. As far as I am concerned, I am in complete
agreement with the argument. There are two reasons why.
First and foremost, advice from others, especially parents, allows
people to solve problems more wisely. Parents,
who have lived a long time have already experienced many things in life, and
thus they have a bigger view on diverse issues. Consequently, gaining advice
from them are is likely to bring about a
better result when we address some problems. For example, when I was in high
school, I was a leader of my class. At that time, I have had a huge misunderstanding that led to a fight with one of my classmate. Thus, I decided not
to speak with him. So I fell out with my friend. My parents suggested that I
should apologize him first to solve the problem. Eventually, I apologized to him first and realized that I have had a big misunderstanding about him. Thanks to the advice
from my parents, I was able to solve the problem well and now get along well
with him. Therefore, advice from others is helpful to solve problems.
On top of that, others can be more objective and give more wise
wiser solutions
in some situations. When people face problems,
many people are easily embarrassed and confused in the situation.
Parents or friends as a outsiders can
give wise suggestions to people since they are not in the problematic
situation. My personal experience can be used to support my view. Last year, my
cousin was severely hurt due to a car accident.
So I was so frustrated and embarrassed. I was in a panic and did not
have any idea to deal with the situation. My friend directly called an
ambulance and he was able to be treated. Without his help, my cousin would not
have been cured properly. Therefore, gaining advice from others is better.
In conclusion,
considering the reasons and examples mentioned above, I strongly believe that
gaining advice from other to solve problems is more beneficial than using only own's
one’s own knowledge and experience.
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