▶ Your Answer : Some people don’t work on their presentation immediately. They assert
it is better way to wait until they come up with a great idea. However, in my
opinion, starting assignment instantly is further far more effective. There are two
reasons why I prefer this way; having more time to practice and preparing for
unexpected situation.
To
begin with, as I start working on a presentation, I can earn more time to
practice it. Obviously, it needs a lot of time to do a presentation with no
mistake. If I couldn’t have enough time to prepare and make presentation, it
might be unsuccessful. For example, in my case, when I was 20 years old, I
started doing my presentation too late and finished it shortly before deadline.
Of course I didn’t prepare to do that, so I can’t satisfied the presentation. 주장과 논리 흐름이 모두 좋습니다. 다만 표현을 좀 더 문어체에 가깝게 활용해주시면 좋을 것 같아요. I로 쓰기보다 people이나 one 등을 주어로 사용해서 일반적인 진술로 표현하면 좀 더 논리를 잘 드러낼 수 있어요.
In addition, to prevent and prepare for unexpected situation, incident, I should start my assignment
as soon as possible. There can be are many unexpected troubles when we do our task. For
instance, the file can be lost, or computer doesn’t work well, and so on. 이런 상황에서 일찍 시작하면 왜 좋은지를 명시적으로 설명해주세요. One
survey have has shown that 77 percent of students surveyed experienced this happening
several times, and they also reported that they couldn’t submit their assignment
in time because of some unexpected the problems. If they had begun to do their presentation more
quickly, they could have found find solution.
To sum up, starting working on a
presentation as soon as possible could earn enough time to do a rehearsal and resolve
unexpected problems. In this regard, I prefer to start working on a presentation
immediately after being assigned.
Comment : 질문 내용에 맞게 일관된 입장과 주장을 잘 설명해주셨어요. 좀 더 구체적으로 설명할 수 있는 부분들을 보완하고 문어체적 표현을 다양하게 활용한다면 훨씬 좋은 글이 될 수 있을 거예요~ 여러 가지 모델에세이 등을 보면서 어투나 표현을 체크해보시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 사례 내용도 출처를 밝혀주고 구체적인 내용들을 보완하면 더 신빙성 높은 사례 제시가 가능하니 참고해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~! Independent Writing Rubrics Score 4/5 An essay at this level largely accomplishes all of the following : - Addresses the topic and task well, though some points may not be fully elaborated (문제의 요구사항을 대부분 잘 해결함) - Is generally well organized and well developed, using appropriate and sufficient explanations, exemplifications and/or details (적절하고 충분한 설명과 예시를 사용하며 대체로 글의 구성과 전개방식이 양호함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though it may contain occasional redundancy, digression, or unclear connections (중복된 내용이나 관련 없는 내용, 불분명한 연결이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 드러남)
- Displays facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety and range of vocabulary, though it will probably have occasional noticeable minor errors in structure, word form or use of idiomatic language that do not interfere with meaning (글의 의미를 손상시키지 않는 범위 내에서 사소한 문장구조, 단어 형태 오류를 보일 수 있으나, 전반적으로 어휘・통사적 다양성을 갖춘 유창한 언어 사용을 보임) |