▶ Your Answer :
The lecturer contends that the reasons for
stranded whales in the reading passage are wrong by contradicting the reading
passage’s claim explaining the background of whales stranding. that the reasons in the reading passage may explain why whales’
stranding happends.
To begin with, the lecturer asserts that
the argument on wind patterns locating whales stranded is not accurate. This
is due to the fact that a lot of whales are being stranded not only near the western coast, where the wind blows towards the coast, but also near the eastern coast
where the wind blows towards the ocean. This counters the author’s claim that
whales get stranded based on the pattern of the wind.
On top of that, the lecturer opposes the idea on illness causing whales to be stranded is unreliable. This is
attributed to the fact that by mentioning the possibility of perfectly healthy whales being stranded. If they
are stranded because of illness, they could not go back to the deep ocean on
their own. However, stranded whales go back to the deep ocean by themselves
once they are pushed by people. This refutes the argument made by the author
that whales may be coming ashore because of illness.
Lastly, the lecturer maintains that whales are not stranded by the geological features of certain coastlines. This is because all whales have the same ability to detect
geological formations, but just some of them are being stranded. If the idea in
the reading passage is right, whales that frequently visit the ocean floor,
which has a very gentle slope, adjacent to beaches will be stranded more than
other whales. However, that is not the case. This casts doubt on the reading
passage’s claim that the ocean floor with a very gentle slope may cause whales
to become disoriented.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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FAIR-GOOD
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GOOD
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FAIR-GOOD
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FAIR
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FAIR
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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- 문장을 지나치게 복잡하게 쓰는 경향이 있습니다 maintains that ~ that. 좀 더 간결하게 ~ 에 반대한다 / 의심을 품는다 등 direct한 문장을 많이 사용해주세요. |