▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that one can learn a lot
about a person from the type of friend he has. However, I believe that people aren’t
able to gain a lot of information about a person from his friends for two
compelling reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of
all, people nowadays tend to maintain relatively a weak relationship with their
friends. People are living in a world of meritocracy where only extremely talented
one can survive. Consequently, many people suffer physically and mentally from
tight schedules and highly competitive environments. In such circumstances, any other
people can be regarded as potential competitors, and there do not exist are not enough
time for people to form strong emotional bonds with others. This explains why
people tend to form a shallow relationship with others, and it is difficult to
learn about someone from these unfamiliar friends. Studies at the Zhejiang
University shows that in the survey they conducted, 65% of people are disposed
to form only superficially good relationship with their friends, and they
seldom tell their friends about their serious problems. Therefore, one cannot
learn a lot about a person from his friends.
Secondly, people today get along
with many different types of people for several reasons. For one, experiencing
various types of people from different backgrounds shows outstanding
effectiveness in improving social skills and extending social network. Unlike
the past, modern society admittedly requires people to surpass others both in
specialty and sociability. To be more specific, interpersonal relationship and
social skills are necessary qualification for any successful person. This
explains why many people struggle to make friends with diverse characteristic
and abilities, and it is impossible to learn about a single person from these
many friends. My personal experience can be illustrated to prove this point. I
am an exchange student, (From where to where?) and I met a lot of friends who came from all over the
world. By talking with them, I not only understood a lot about foreign cultures,
but also learnt to deal with various types of people. It was obvious that we
all have different characteristics, and the way we think was quite different. Hence,
knowing one’s personality from the type of his friends is nearly implausible.
To sum up, I believe that one
cannot learn a lot about a person from the type of
friend he has,
for people tend to maintain relatively weak relationship with their friends,
and they also get along with many different types of people. Consequently, the
importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the reasons I have mentioned
above.
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채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 4 | 3
| 3 | 3 | Score | Fair 17-23 | - 첫 번째 내용의 "shallow relationship이 보편적이다. " 라는 주장을 certain type of friends he or she has라는 부분과 잘 연결해주셔야 합니다.
- 두 번째 내용 역시, type of friends라는 부분과는 다소 먼 느낌이 있어요.
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