■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Domestication of dogs-> 3판 DT 1번 |
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▶ Your Answer : Although dogs are most preferred domestic animal as a pet, there are still controversy about origin of the dog. First, is it true that dog were domesticated from wolves, true or false? It is (줄임말 사용을 하지 말아주세요.) false because wolf’s theory of hunting is chasing after a prey but human’s early hunting style was using a trap so it’s 100% opposite to make a advantage to human domesticating wolf. Also wolf itself is very aggressive and it gets harsher when it gets older. To domesticate this aggressive predator is too hard for early humans to do. Second, dogs were domesticated about 26,000 B.C. according to a fossil which showed a footprint of a boy and a dog walking together. This tells us that dogs were domesticated 10000 years earlier than researchers thought. Third, dogs weren’t first domesticated from China. A lot of diverse species of dog fossil was found not only in China but also in Europe, North America, and (나열을 할 때 맨 마지막 element 앞에는 and을 써줍니다) Middle East. |
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. 기본적으로 통합형 에세이가 어떤 목적으로 쓰이는지 잘 모르시는 것 같다는 생각이 듭니다.
베이직 틀이 잡혀있지 않아서 렉쳐와 리딩 지문 간의 대비도 없고
연결어 사용도 없습니다.
다른 분들이 쓰신 통합형 에세이를 많이 접하면서 어떤 형식으로 써야하는지를
차차 알아가셔야 수월하게 작성하실 수 있습니다.
지금은 그저 정보 전달에 그치는 수준입니다. 비교가 목적이어야 합니다!
3. introduction의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*