■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Some people like to buy clothes online, while other people choose to try on clothes themselves at a mall. which do you prefer and why? |
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▶ Your Answer : With developing of the online shopping malls many of the people like to enjoy their shopping through the internet since it provides many benefits for buying clothes. But others say that still visiting malls and buying the clothes at the stores is better for people because it has so many (가산명사) of strong points. And I believe that off-line shopping for buying new clothes is much better for following reasons.
First visiting mall lets us to make better decision when it comes to choosing and buying the clothes. To be specific, sometimes the clothes which people find through the internet are not exactly the same as real one. They have different color, texture or especially size. But mall provides us to see, touch and even try on the clothes which we want to buy. Thus it offers much useful chance to find and buy the right ones. For example, whenever I buy the pants I visit the department store or outlet store because I failed several times to buy the pants for my size. After the experience I visit the shop and try on the pants which I Iike to buy. And depending on the brands the printed size of the pants is (주어 동사 불일치) different so for me it is much better for buying clothes.
Secondly, nowadays online shopping mall are popping up like mushrooms. Consequently, many malls go bankrupt and end their business. And certain amount of the online shops are not exist. For example, my wife liked to use the online shops because she could access the shops any time and any where she was. But she said many of the shops disappeared now and she did not get the clothes she ordered. The owner of the shops took advantages of the fragile of the online shopping. They took the money and did not send (원형) the products to the customers. Thus she does not use the online shopping any more. Considering this side effect of the online shopping mall, we do not have to worry about the problems at the off-line shopping mall. (왜 그런지에 대한 이유도 함께 작성해주세요)
In conclusion, I firmly agree with the opinion that using mall is much more beneficial for people when it comes to buying clothes. The off-line shopping mall provides us opportunity to check out the products on the spots and it gives us makes right decisions. And comparing the shops trust worthy of the tow shopping mall, the online and off-line shopping malls, off-line one is much more reliable for buying the clothes which we want. |
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. and 으로 문장을 시작하지 말아주세요.
3. 동어 반복이 상당히 자주 일어나고 있습니다.
shopping mall, clothes 같이 특정 단어가 굉장히 많이 나옵니다.
동의어와 대명사를 적극적으로 활용하셔서 동어 반복을 줄여주세요.
4. 철자 오류가 잦은 편입니다. 심한 감점의 요인이 될 수 있으니, 에세이 작성을 마치시고 꼼꼼히 검토해주세요.
+) 단어를 외우실 때 스펠링을 집중적으로 외워주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*