■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : 해커스 토플 라이팅 인터미디엇 독립형 hackers test 02번 |
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▶ Your Answer : It is debatable whether the elderly need exercise more than young people do. However, in my opinion, it is very beneficial for the elderly to exercise more often because they need to be more healthy than now and they actually do not move in everyday. To begin with, I think that it is necessary for the elderly to exercise, since they are usually sick and weak. They are definitely weaker than young people and are likely to get ailments or plague. The elderly have difficulty dealing with diseases as well. For example. my mother was recommended by a doctor to exercise everyday. Since she had high blood pressure, she must work out everyday at least for (전치사 필요) an hour. Additionally she had complex about her body and always concerned about her weight. She was so stressed out because of these problems. It led to her mental problems and made her sicker. She decided to exercise five times a week and she became a healthy woman in my family and she was satisfied with her body and health. On top of that, I think that the elderly might move less than younger people. Most elder people are not active due to their complicated matters. They do not have enough body force to do something, because they already have consumed their energy. Therefore, they do not have enough time and energy to exercise for their health. However, health is very important for all people including the elderly. Studies have found that 80 percent of elder people do not work out on a weekly basis and only 30 percent of young people do not work out. This result shows that how many elder people do not move and it is very serious problems in present society. To sum up, exercising is very essential for elder people to maintain their health well and keep them moving actively. In this regard, I strongly agree with the statement that the elderly have to make an effort in exercising for their health.
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1. this result shows that how many elder people do not move and it is very serious problems in present society.
두 번째 바디 문단에서 이러한 현상이 왜 사회적으로 심각한 문제인지에 대해
서술해주세요. (ex. sedentary life pattern -> high death rate)
2. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
3. 철자 오류가 종종 있는 편입니다. 심한 감점의 요인이 될 수 있으니, 에세이 작성을 마치시고 꼼꼼히 검토해주세요.
+) 단어를 외우실 때 스펠링을 집중적으로 외워주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*