■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Today, people only do a few things well._[disagree] |
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▶ Your Answer : It is often said that people of modern society only do a few things well. This is because people are too busy working. Usually, they do not have spare time to learn other things besides their work. However, I oppose the argument. To be specific, those who want to be hired need competitiveness themselves and doing various things makes people get well-rounded education. To begin with, many companies require us some creativity. Most people graduate high-quality university. Also they invest a lot of time getting multiple qualifications to get a job. At this time, they acquire nearly the same subjects. For instance, they study (완전한 문장 필요) TOEIC, TOFEL, EXCEL, POWERPOINT, etc. So people build their careers which are different from others. Studies have shown that the average number of qualifications held by new employees doubled in the last 10 years. In addition, people who were adopted by corporation are very flexible. They succeed in any project in any department. Their productivity quality is superior. Even though when they went to business trip, the rates of making a contract (단/복수) are high. A person who has diverse skills works better than that of just doing only a few things. On top of that, people get well-rounded education. Students are required to take several different courses. These courses include not only academic subjects but also artistic materials. Even these have polite classes. Moreover studying each thing makes it easy to find their potential easy (potential easy가 무슨 뜻인가요?) . As a result, it helps people to be what they want. In high school, for example, I had to take math and science as well as two languages. It helped (시제 -> 과거) to find my own ability. I was talented in the linguistics, so I developed this skill that I acquired Spanish qualification, DELE. To sum up, doing several things nowadays is being a person who is creative, an all-rounder. Also as I mentioned above, it is possible to get a seat in competition of the job market. A period of taking various classes can be a human as citizen polite and skillful. Consequently, to acquire plenty of materials more efficiency. In this regard, I believe that multiple capacities are welcomed by any kinds of firms. In other words, rearing lots of parts is an (관사) important factor in the present. |
1. 사소한 문법 오류가 잦은 편입니다. proof-reading을 꼼꼼하게 해주세요. 2. make는 사역동사이기 때문에 뒤에 to부정사가 아닌 동사원형이 옵니다.
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3. 지금은 에세이의 내용 자체 보다는 문법이 먼저인 단계인 것 같습니다.