▶ Topic : The writer of the reading passage and the lecturer talk about the the effects of the harmful gases in the air. The writer explains the negative influences of the gases while the lecturer raises specific counterclaims ans poins out why the gases' effects are not negative.
To begin with, the lecturer explains that agriculture can not be affected by greenhouse gases because of the technologies. Even if the greenhouse gases have negative effect on agriculture, the advanced technologies will help the negative effect decrease. This in in compete opposition to the point of the reading passage, stating that the gases have negative affect on agriculture, insiting negatively affected on agriculture, insisting that the increase in the amount dioxide in the air, greenhouse gas, makes the planet warmer and eventually result decrease of the amount of crop yield. in the decrease in the amount of crop yield.
Furthermore, the second assertion, that the gases can make people's skin cancer is refuted by the lecturer. The lecturer states that developing item will help people protect their skin from the gases. For instance, one of the cosmetic companies made new sun cream that protect sun cream that protects (sun cream은 단수 주어 입니다) people's skin from the sun. (리딩의 정보는 어디에 있는 것인가요?)
Finally, regarding the last point about economic loss, the writer insists that the poisonous gases can lead to economic loss. The lecture, however, contends that there are solutions to solve the problems. To be specific, developing paints can keep the building from rain that contains nitrogen oxide and sulfur oxide, so the negative influences of rain can decline.
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