■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :
A/D: Children
should play sports for fun rather than for competition
ME: agree
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▶ Your Answer :
Regarding
the issue of whether children have to play sports for fun rather than for
competition has been a current debate. The answer to this question can greatly
vary depending on the individual’s perspectives. However, after pondering upon
the idea from several viewpoints, I am of the opinion that it is better for
children to enjoy sports as fun activities, and there are some reasons for
that.
To begin with, the main reason why parents encourage sports to their
children is to strengthen body and give a good way to refresh children’s minds.
Competition with each other just causes stress, so it is bad for health.
According to a recent poll conducted by a famous research center, more than
half of P.E. teachers responded that the primary goal of sports is exercising.
Moreover, according to a research carried out in 2009 at the University of
Calgary, there is no certain evidence that sports activities based on
competition benefits most of usual students, such as leadership, cooperation,
or attitude to attitude of fair play. Rather, there are evident positive
influences that sports activities for merely fun, such as releasing stress,
cooperation ability, and following the rules. These results show that it has
more advantages to allow kids to play sports for their own pleasure.
On
top of that, most competitions are not fair. This is because kids do not have
the same sizes or strengths. For instance, when I was younger, my sister, who
is smaller than me, often lost basketball matches against bigger and taller friends
than her. Although she had a good sense, she always felt the limitation of
natural-born difference and was teased by her friends. Now, she lost interests
and confidence in sports. Looking at my sister, I felt that most of all
competitive sports are unfair, having more disadvantages than advantages for
children’s minds.
To
sum up, sports are for exercising and healthy body, and competition in sports
is usually unfair. In this regard, I
believe that children should play sports for just their own pleasure. (340자)
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