▶ Your Answer : These days,people often go to the movie theater including me. And many books are sold in bookstore next to the movie theater. Even though movie is good way to have a good time, but I think reading books are more good to spend time even educational and meaningful to our life To begin with, movies are so funny because it shows a lot of stimulating scenes. Movies are made to earn money from people, so it can stressful to some people and not educational.(so로 연결되었는데 앞 문장과 연결이 되지 않습니다) Also, there are lots of books to educate and gain advice of life. However, there are many books to get advice and relieve the stress. For example, the book I read a couple of month ago, this book illuminate me by introducing the story that descended by old people. So, I learn how to treat my stress and talk meaningfully. Also even now I am thankful to the author who wrote this book. Secondly, it needs a lot of time to read books. Movies are hard to include many meanings in 2 hours. On the contrary, books can contain many meanings throughout all pages. So author do not have to labor when write the book. If you spend lots of time to read book, you can concentrate on the contents of books than watching movies. For instance, when I was young, I read the book which were that recommended by my elementary school teacher. The books are so funny and thick, so I read this book every day. And it became my booster of life. Books can relieve your stress and make you funny long time. I sometimes watch a movie, but read books more than. You can watch movies but I recommend read books that can give you to lots of fun and advice that help you to live off your life. and와 but으로는 문장을 시작하지 않는 것을 더 선호합니다. 주장을 문장으로 옮기는데에 있어 문장력이나 어휘를 사용하는 방식이 약간은 약해보입니다. 제 생각엔 에세이 연습 보다는 문장 쓰기 연습이 더 필요할 것 같습니다. 또, 어휘가 아주 기본적인 편이고, 많이 반복되는 듯 합니다. 조금 더 다양한 표현 쓸 수 있도록 공부 필요하실 듯 합니다.
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