▶ Your Answer :
Some
people believe that governments should invest as much money as possible exploring
other planets like the moon, while others feel that governments have to spend
more money on fulfilling the basic demand of people on Earth think differently. In my opinion,
governments should expend money to address many issues in Earth first rather
than using it to travel to outer space for two reasons for the following two subsequent reasons.
First of all, the cost of exploring the
universe is able to be used to save millions of lives in poor countries can be used to save people in developing countries. Governments
should spend a fortune to shoot one rocket to the moon (이 문장이 나온 이유가 무엇인가요?). If I think it is more valuable
than providing medicine or education service to those in need, my answer is
definitely no. For instance, more than 40% of people in Malawi which is the
country in Africa are living under the poverty line. It means that most of Malawi
people are earning less than one dollar per day. Surprisingly, the United
States spends 0.1% of their GDP every year to develop technology for making to make spaceships, and it is the same amount of Malawi’s one year GDP.
In addition to this, I think to address the
environmental crises of the earth is imperative more than ever before. Exploring
outside of earth is mainly for future generations, but what if our future
generations are not able to be existed due to the demise of the earth? For
instance, according to the scientists who are studying the level of the oceans,
the ecosystem will be totally destroyed in 200 years considering the speed of the
increase of the ocean surface. I bet that it is more plausible to find a way to
save our planet than find another planet to move the whole human being in 200
years.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that
there are more critical issues than exploring outer space on earth. Therefore,
governments should be prior to spending the budget to address problems like
poverty or global warming rather than make space stations or researching other stars.
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