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The reading passage states that there are several problems related to imposing congestion fees has clear benefits for several reasons. (several problems has clear benefits? 둘 중의 하나만 써주셔야 할 것 같네요. 문장을 다듬어 주세요.) On the other hand, the lecturer explain how theses concerns can be alleviated.
First, the speaker argues that example of London which create damage (created / damaged 둘 중 의미에 맞는 표현으로 수정해주세요. ) businesses in the city is misleading because it was occurred (occur은 자동사이므로 수동태 표현을 쓰지 않습니다.) during recession of economies. In addition, before long, degraded economies began to grow again as well as sales was increased consequently. This is in response to the reading passage’s point that charging a congestion fee could impede businesses in the city.
Second, according to the lecturer, in terms of setting financial burden on people by congestion fees is disputable. This is because low-income people already utilize public transportations. For example, buses can get them to their destination more quickly than ever before. Reading이나 Lecture을 모르는상태에선 정확히 이해가 되지 않는 문장입니다. 이 문장이 어떻게 For example이라는 접속사로 연결될 수 있는지에 대한 의문도 드네요. This shows solution to the reading passage’s concern over the fact that congestion fees might put the poor with responsible for financial burdensome under financial burden.
The final point made by the lecturer is that increasing the increase of delivery cost is not true. This is due to the fact that delivery company would consolidate their systems efficiently so that people could receive quicker service. Also, throughout this system, transfer prices is possible to promote these system on stabilization. This addresses the reading passage’s problem that the expenses of convey service would be increase precipitously as a result of imposed congestion fees.
주요 채점기준 (항목별 5-4-3-2-1점수로 30점 만점 자가채점)
논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task
적절한 설명 appropriate explanation
적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details
일관성, 단계적 구성, 주제와의 연관성 unity, progression, coherence
다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety
적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity
Writing 0–30 score scale
Fair (19-23)
글의 문장 하나하나는 이해가 가지만,
전체적으로 Reading과 Lecture간의
대립구조가 잘 잡히지 않았던 글입니다. 본론의 구조가