In the lecture, the professor has refuted the doubts about truthfulness of the Chevaller stories suggested in the reading passage such as being a rich man when Chevaller lived in Switzerland, Conversing with the famous French writer Voltair, and escaping the infamous prison in Venice.
( 문장끊기 연습 ! 해주세요, 불 필요하게 나열 되어 있는 느낌을 줍니다.
주장이 불분명합니다. 본인 생각은? 언급 해주세요 )
The professor disproved the first doubt which is Chevaller was not a rich man but he could pretend to be rich because he borrowed huge amount of money from the Switzerland bank by explaining the students how the money could be earned.
The fortune can be earned by investing it first. therefore Chevaller had just invested his money to make himself rich. Borrowing money from the bank doesn't mean he lied about his wealthy life in Switzerland.
(설명이 불충분 합니다. 그래서 어떠한 의견을 반박하는지 Chevaller was not a rich man right? 주장에 focus를 더 해서 예시를 들어 주세요 )
The second point the critics argue about is that his memoir concerned with the conversation with French writer Voltair.
Critics often claims that Chevaller did not tell the truth about this because he wrote about this incident some years after he met Voltair, so he couldn't possibly remember every details of the conversation he shared with Voltair. However, professor suggested the testimonies of the Chevaller's close people which tell us that he had a good habit of taking note any time, anywhere.( 역시나 주장의 뒷받침, 반박이 너무 엉성합니다. 더 specific하게 써 주세요 )
주요 채점기준 (항목별 5-4-3-2-1점수로 30점 만점 자가채점)
논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task
적절한 설명 appropriate explanation
적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details
일관성, 단계적 구성, 주제와의 연관성 unity, progression, coherence
다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety
적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity
Writing 0–30 score scale
Limited - Fair (16–20)
-문법 오류가 너무 많아 내용 전달력이 떨어집니다. 시제표현, 수일치, 태, 품사활용 등에 유의하면서 꼼꼼하게 문장을 작성해주세요.
-supporting detail들이 너무 약하고 연결고리를 찾기 어렵습니다.
-문장을 한문장씩 연결시키는 연습을 해주세요
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