decline of Mexican civilization
듣기 노트 theories about decline of Teotihuacan -> X convincing
1. city burned small fraction -> damage : X devastating
-evidence : local arts after the fire
2. drought regular
- ppl. could cope with by irrigation (building canal)
3. deforestation -> over 100 yrs. continued
- overcame: by trading w/ other countries
wood <-> domestic demand
*진하게 표시한 부분은 제가 파악한 문단의 주요 내용이니 참고하세요^^
The lecturer argues that although there are some theories about why Teotihuacan declined, they are not convincing. This is in opposition to the reading passage's assertion that these theories are quite trustworthy.
First of all, the lecturer insists that the city burned only a small fraction. In fact, the damage was not so devastating. It is supported by local art works arts recently found in the city, which was made after the fire. 화재 이후에 만들어진 예술작품이라고 하면 damage 정도를 증명해주지 못할 것 같아요. 정리하시는 과정에서 실수가 있었던 것은 아닌지 다시 지문 내용을 점검해주세요. This casts doubt on the reading passage's argument that the city collapsed after the fire, caused by foreign invasion.
On top of that, the lecturer contends that the drought was regular while the civilization prospered. Citizens had the ability to cope with such a drought by buildnig canals. This contradicts the reading passage's claim that severe drought led the Teotihuacan people to death. drought라는 명확한 대립점이 잘 드러나 있고, 두 지문의 반박구도도 잘 드러나 있습니다. lecture의 주장도 입장과 연결지어서 'drought가 멸망원인이 되었다고 보긴 어렵다'하는 식으로 다듬어봐도 좋을 것 같아요.
Finally, the lecturer asserts that the deforestation occurred not rapidly, but slowly over 100 years. People were able to overcome this problem by trading with other countries. They sold their wood and bought supplies they need. 말씀하신 것처럼 detail부분 수정해주세요. This refutes the reading passage's contention that the rapid deforestation was the main cause of the collapse. 대립되는 point가 잘 드러나 있습니다. detail 잘못 정리하신 부분만 수정해주시면 될 것 같아요.
Writing 0–30 score scale
Fair (17–23)
전반적으로 대립구도가 잘드러나고 요약문의 형태가 잘 잡혀 있습니다. 제가 정확하게 지문의 내용을 모르는 상태에서 요약 형식이나 detail들만을 가지고 평가한 부분이므로 꼭! detail이 잘못 정리되거나 빠진 부분들을 한 번 더 꼼꼼하게 체크해주세요. 지금 하고 계신 것처럼 답안과 double-check하는 연습이 도움이 많이 됩니다. good! 수고 많으셨습니다^^화이팅!