Some people think that it is not necessary to have a family gathering regularly. Because they are very busy in nowadays and think that it spend so much time gathering. However, I am convinced that it is necessary to have a family gathering on a regular basis. There are two reasons why I feel this way. One reason for my argument is that regular family gathering keeps you contact distant relatives. The other reason is that family can give you moral guideline. Joining these two sentences will make better thesis statement.
First of all, regular family gathering can give you an opportunity to contact distant relatives. We can update each other about their lives. Since they come from variety cities and have different age, we can indirectly experience what do you experience??? through our relatives` story and which communication helps keep family ties strong.
혼란스러운 문장이네요 너무 많은 idea 가 한문장에있네요. 친척들의 이야기를 통하여 간접적으로무엇을 경험하였다 라고 써있는데 무엇을 경험하였나요? 그 무엇을 써주지 않으면 목적을 전달할 수 없는 빈 문장이 됩니다. which communication helps에서 which가 목적격으로 쓰였는데 관계된 선행사나 적절한 선행사가 앞에 없어서 왜 그런지 잘 모르겠네요. Point 는 많으나 모두 2%부족하여 아무의미가 없는 문장이되어버렸네요. 각 point 마다 따로따로 문장을 만들어서 써주세요.
In my case, our family has a family meeting regularly. We always talked each other lives and this talking made me fun. And also I am proud of my family as we share a close bond.
Second, family gatherings offer a chance to restore moral guidelines. When we are young, it is the responsibility of our elders to keep us within acceptable social boundaries. From their guide line, we learned how to behave and grow up to be right people. However, we sometime forget these teaching. Going to a family gathering, we are quickly reminded of why we need to lives by their guideline and we also have responsibility be responsible to pass on these moral guidelines to our young relatives.
In conclusion, regular family gatherings provide the opportunity for relatives to bond by sharing their lives. In addition, it gives older relatives the chance to reestablish moral guidelines and to pass them on to younger relatives. For these reasons, I feel that family gatherings should be held on a regular basis.