■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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▶ Topic : In order to stay well-informed, people should get information from various news sources.
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▶ Your Answer :
It is evident that in our current society, getting news from
a variety of media has tremendous importance in our lives and it is common
thing. Opinions are divided over the
taking information from various sources is needed to people in order to be well
informed. I do not agree with this statement for two reasons. Firstly, different view of many sources is
confusing. Moreover, I think getting information from various news sources keep
people from deep understanding.
More than anything else, people would be confused
when they get information from a lot of news sources, because each media has
different opinion about one fact. Thus people cannot be in well informed. This
reminds me of the time when I traveled to some countries of Africa in college
years. While there, I was highly shocked by the large number of people who were
suffering from starvation and AIDS. Naturally
I become to have interest about problem of poverty in Africa countries. So,
when I came back to the Korea, I searched information about those countries
that I visited from many websites. I read lots of articles, however, each of
them has different contents. Some sources said that countries’ government in
Africa does not spend their money improving quality of people’s lives. In
contrast, other news said that their government cannot afford to support their
nation, and serious poverty is caused by not enough aid from advanced
countries. Therefore, after I saw these sources, I could not know the real truth
and confused due to the totally different information. As my experience shows,
the information from various materials makes people to be confused.
In addition, I think it is impossible to have deep
understanding without enough time for one source. Let me explain my case that
can support my claim. When I was in high school, I had to submit report about
global warming in the class. I was eagerly in that class, so thought that
getting lots of information is best way to know the issue. Thus, I tried to
find information as many as possible both in library and in video posted in the
Internet. However, it was impossible for me to fully understand all detail of
my all collected sources because of enormous quantity of information. Thus,
teacher of that class gave me a comment that I have a just superficial
knowledge, and suggested me to read just one thesis many times than to glance
many articles to stay in well informed. In this sense, we can definitely notice
that if we obtain information from many new sources, we cannot totally understand
all of it.
As mentioned above regarding the issue, I think
people are not able to stay well informed when they get information from many
news media for following reasons. First reason is that people are confused by different
information from variety of news sources. Furthermore, lots of news materials
prevent people from fully understanding of exact fact. In a nutshell, finding information from lots
of new sources is not beneficial to stay well informed.
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첨삭해주시는분께!!
제가 1년반 만에 토플을 다시시작해서 처음써본 독립형 에세이입니다
지난번에는 높은점수가 필요하지않아 사실 라이팅에 열정을 쏟지않았고
당연히 점수는 항상 거의 22였습니다.(거의 fair 막판에 독립형만 good 나왔어요)
이제는 적어도 25점은 맞아야 하거든요(총점 100필요)
제일 문제점이 어떤것인지 좀 코멘트 부탁드립니다
그리고 현재 이정도면 몇점정도 수준인지 알고싶습니다
감사합니당 ^^