■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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▶ Your Answer :
I've seen or heard about people that do not have to work because of their formidable amount of money they inherited, and ostensibly, their lives were almost something that would exist in my imaginary world: having a swimming pool in their house and owning hundreds of bank accounts. In fact, what I felt was not jealousy, but mere curiosity about how they would feel not having an occupation and keep spending money. At last, I figured out that it wouldn't be so happy living with enough money without a job.
First of all, living without pleasure that comes from the meaningfulness of working would be unfortunate. People can feel happiness in various situations at workplace. One would feel proud of himself with the thought of being a productive and helpful member of the society. If the occupation also fits with one’s aptitude, the pleasure will grow even more. In addition, the relationships between companions may sometimes be stressful, but building these new relationships would be beneficial for his life, too. Likewise, having a job can make a person’s life more meaningful and at the same time, joyful. Therefore, I would dare call the lives of people who have enough money to lay idly, vain.
Furthermore, working makes free time more enjoyable and meaningful. Whatever the action is, a person would feel tedious when something is repeated interminably. This is the reason why people try to find balance between work and leisure- to refresh oneself and not to feel tedium in life. Time distributed appropriately to both activities, one could make his life more prolific by concentrating every time. However, those living in financial abundance without a job could never find the true meanings and effects of having free time. Actually, when I got my vacation, I played a computer game that I had had no chance to play during semester. However, after playing it relentlessly for a few days without working, playing the game was rather boring than intriguing. I found out later that playing the game is more enjoyable after doing something productive for some time.
To sum up, working can give lots of pleasure to a person and also, it helps us really enjoy leisure. For these reasons, I belive those people who live with enough money to spend and hence don't work wouldn't be as happy as we, average people.
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연어님 첨삭 정말 많이 도움 되었습니다! 앞으로도(그리고 다른 분들께도) 잘 부탁드려요^^