Many people think that grading only makes student competitive competition among students, therefore they insists that grading is not necessary for students. However, In my view, I think that grading is essential for students to learn better. This is because it rules motivator motivates and makes students learn better.
To begin with, grading takes an aim as a motivator therefore students learn better than without grading. It is clear that people had have different products depend on having aim. (Apparently, having specific aim can produce better achievement.) When they have clear goal, they will work hardly for reaching their aim. In contrast, without aim, they tend to be lazy and delinquent. Therefore grading also takes as an goal then it urges students to learn hardly. According to a survey conducted by MBC, one of the Korean republic broadcasting stations, 70 percent of people, among surveyed people, responded that grading is really needed for students' to learning. In the survey of more than a thousand people in the Seoul metropolitan area, the respondents said that grading is helpful because it makes students learn better than without situations, based on their experience.
Also, grading helps students's to learning syst i ematically and effectively. After getting grade, students get to know that where what is volunable vulnerable and or other part is strong to them in their study. Then they can complement at complete his or her missing part and it leads students to learn effectively effective learning. Moreover, this activity will raise their learning quality. To illustrate this point, L let me take my experience for this. My school was only gave final grades to us. However, the school policy was changed that they showed up our mid-term grades too. Due to changed school's rule, we could kneow that our shortcoming lesson and tried try to complement complete for it. Therefore we got better final grades. This is proves that grading helps students can learn their study fully understand and syst i ematically.
To sum up, I definitely believe that gradinig is has positive effects on student's learning not only gives motivation but also helps students to learn effectively.
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