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University athletic departments should receive the same amount of funding as university libraries.
As the world changes faster than ever before, the society requires students to study more than in the past. In such society, most of universities are inclined to fund more their libraries than athletic departments. However, in my opinion, Universities should invest an equal amount of money in both libraries and sports departments. There are two reasons I could discuss to support my opinion.
First, sports activities play a pivotal role in enhancing student’s physical health. This is evidenced by a number of clinical studies that clearly show that a variety of physically active aerobic exercises such as cycling, running, yoga, especially during one’s twenties, build and strengthen muscles. More importantly, habitual physical activity has a positive effect on reducing the risks of diabetes and hypertension. To illustrate this point, my cousin led a sedentary life by being glued to the computer for hours everyday. Inevitably, he suffered from severe obesity as a result of inactive lifestyle. However, he began to lose considerable weight after he joined a fitness club in college and started exercising for two hours everyday for five months as his doctor suggested. Eventually, his body perfectly changed and his physical health was dramatically improved by exercising. Therefore, people will be much healthier by participating in athletic activities in their universities
Second, sports activities foster student’s social skills. This is because they can learn a lot of skills, such as cooperation and leadership, from sports activities. Students who participate in sports activities are able to have chances to learn how to lead other members or how to make other people enhance their confidence to win the game by playing games. The best example is a soccer game. They cheer for their teammate, pass the ball to one another, and strive together for the common goal of leading the game to victory, one that a single person cannot attain. Through this activity, students can have the chance to learn how to cooperate and work as a team. Thus, Students can learn social skills from sports activities in universities.
To sum up, I strongly believe that universities should give the same amount of money to student’s athletic departments as they do to their libraries for two reasons: Physical health and social skills |