In the lecture, the speaker disputes the idea of the reading passage that student's evaluation should be integral part such as class attendance, participation, and effort toward learning. The speaker demonstrates that these are not a good way to evaluate student's evaluation.
To begin with, when students get sick, or catch get caught in emergency problem problme, the students they will get penalized. (author의 주장인지 lecturer의 말인지 정확하게 써 주세요.) This view is contrary of to the reading passage’s claim that if class attendance is considered an important part of the student's education and evaluation evulation, the students will not skip the class. It will give students more chances to be exposed to class materials, which will lead to better performance.
Second, the speaker mentions that class participation is not productive way to evaluation evaluate students. If the teacher scores student’s evaluation on about how much students mentions about their students opinion, the students will start superficial discussion. This completely rebuts the point of the reading passage that there is correlation between class participation and learning. Class participation leads to active learning participation.
Last, the speaker controverts the idea of the author that students' efforts toward learning should be assessed. When students take part in difficulty class course, provided providing extra score lead to learning more in challengeing class. (학생들의 노력으로 extra score을 받을 수 있는 것이 learning을 부추긴다는 내용으로 쓰는 게 좋을 것 같습니다.) He asserts that the speaker says that students will just pretend to study hard, however the students will not try do theselves their best. (He가 누구를 지칭하는지 명확하지 않습니다. 그리고 speaker가 말한 내용이라면 he asserts that이란 부분은 안 쓰셔야 합니다. 그리고 however은 문장을 이어주는 접속사로 맞지 않게 사용되어있습니다. 수정해주세요.)
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전반적인 reading과 lecture의 비교구조가 약한 것 같습니다. 정확하게 reading의 주장과 lecture의 주장을 비교하고, 그 이유를 하나씩 비교해 주셔야 합니다. 그리고 First, Second, Last 를 사용해서 에세이의 구조를 잡을 경우 intro에서 앞으로 list를 할 것이라는 것을 말해주는 것이 좋습니다. 지문과 듣기 내용의 detail에 조금 더 신경써서 정확하게 비교를 해 주시면 좋을 것 같네요.
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