In addition, it boosts the interest of students in studying. There are many students who are not interested in studying, simply because they do not find it interesting for to them. Studying specifically about certain topics will help them to find their talents or interests. For example, I can recall that when I took art class, the teacher offered to teach taught me more about painting ->brush techniques and drawing methods after school. Until she gave me the special lesson, I thought I was not very good at art, but as she taught me more detailed and harder techniques, but I found out that I love have some talent for arts, and come to have interest in it. 그리고 나서 어떻게 열심히 공부하고 어떤 결과가 나타났는지 써 줘야 예가 완성되겠지요. >>나는 그리고 그리기를 반복했고, 관련된 과목들을 공부했다. 해부학, 심리학, 그리고 수학까지도. 나의 노력들 때문에, 나는 나의 붓 사용 테크닉을 발전시킬 수 있었고, 결국 나는 여러 대회에서 상들을 많이 탔다. I practiced drawing and painting again and again, and I studied related fields including anatomy, phychology, and even mathmatics. Owing to such my efforts, I could develop my brush techniques and I could won a lot of prizes in a variety of contests. After all, I became a professioanl artist. I am fully satisfied with my job.이정도 쓰고 마무리 문장 써주면 되겠어요.
This made me realize that it is very important to know well what you are studying in order to fully grasp your ability. I would be the first one to admit that learning general subjects helps students find what they are interested in. However, it does not provide an environment where students can focus on one subject. Therefore, I think that studying more detailed subjects encourage students to know what they really enjoy learning. ->마무리 문장도 쓰시긴 했는데 앞에서 나온 내용이 다시나오고 있어요. 그럴필요 없구요..마무리 문장 잘 써주시면 되겠습니당. 써보면..
I think my efforts can compare with vacational training for other jobs, considering having specific purposes, leading one to be fully ready to one's future job, and making one study related fields. In this sense, learning specific careers is a strong way to let students' dreams come true.
As a way of conclusion, based on the arguments explained above, I am of the opinion that as schools should prepare have students prepare for their future in a bigger society to do so,it is much more beneficial for them to teach about detailed subjects than general topics. ->schools should teach useful subjects to their future jobs than general those.
수고 하셨습니다. ^^