The speaker argues that there are numerous benefits in using distant learning programs. This point of view contradicts the reading passage’s claim that online degree program has many disadvantages. ( 좋습니다. 하지만 살을 좀 더 붙혀 주세요. 자연스럽게 topic을 이끌수 있도록 )
To begin with, the lecturer maintains that there are a variety of sources to let people know online degree programs. This is because ranking and reviews about quality of lectures are offered and these enable people to get better understanding about online learning programs. ( 예시 한가지를 넣어 주시면 더 완벽한body가 되실듯 합니다. 너무 간략 합니다. )
This casts doubt on the reading passage’s assumption that many people are not familiar with distant learning programs and this fact make it difficult for job seekers who get online degrees to get a job.
In addition, the speaker states that students taking online degree programs are able to have a chance to interact with other students and develop online communication skills which are required skills from global companies.
This rebuffs the reading passage’s claim that students in online programs lack social and interpersonal skills because they do not have an opportunity to communicate with other people.
Lastly, the lecturer maintains that students cheating or plagiarizing during online classes can be detected thanks to various kinds of programs. This is because there are programs detecting replicated essays by searching same word automatically.
( body를 2개로 줄여보시고 focus 해주세요 )
This argument goes against the claim in the reading passages that students being taught online cannot be under direct
supervision while they are taking exams and doing assignments because they can get second-hand help. ( conlusion부분이 너무 짧습니다. body 에 쓰셨던걸 좀 더 general 하게 이끌어 나가시면서 문장을 마무리 하셔야 합니다. )
- 처음 쓰신것 으로 보았을때 매우good ! - 문장 짜임새 신경 써 주세요 intro , body 1,2, conlcusion. 다 이들 만의 특색이 있습니다. 그리고body 부분에 적절한 예시로supporting 해주는 연습을 따로 따로 해보시면 도움이 많이 될 것 같습니다.
주요 채점기준 (항목별 5-4-3-2-1점수로 30점 만점 자가채점) 논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task 적절한 설명 appropriate explanation 적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details 일관성, 단계적 구성, 주제와의 연관성 unity, progression, coherence 다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety 적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity Writing 0–30 score scale Limited (10-16)
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