Do you agree or disagree with the folloing statement?
All high school students should be required to have three years of studying a foreign language.
use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
*진하게 표시한 부분은 제가 파악한 문단의 주요 내용이니 참고하세요^^
In these days, many schools requrie that students study a forein language and some universities univrsitise can be entered by using accept students with the good foreign language scores score such as TOEIC, TOEFL and JPT. These results are based on the current society that has network to all over the world. Therefore, I agree that every high school students have to study a foreing langague for three years with following my detail opinons and reasons based on my experiences.
Firstly, the current society requries the high quality speakers of foreign language. '사회가 원하니까'라는 피상적인 설명보다는 구체적으로 학생들이 3년동안 의무적으로 외국어를 공부하면 좋은 점에 대해 설명하는 편이 좋습니다. 구체적으로 사회생활에 잘 적응할 수 있다거나, futuer career를 쌓는 데 도움이 된다거나 하는 식으로 구체적인 idea로 더 발전시켜주시고 그에 대한 설명 내용도 보완해주세요. 단순히 관련된 사례내용만으로는 논리력을 보여주기에 불충분합니다. body1한문단으로합쳐주세요 When I entered my company, I had have to pass the exam of English the english test because I had have to use English the english for the works in my company which had has many branch offices over the world. Without the forein language, English, it was is impossible to work there and to control my company processes normally. Also, these days, many companies try company tries to widen widethen their influence branche to the world to get more money and to win from the confetition with the companies of other countries such as Samsung, LG and Hyundai in Republic of Korea. To learn the foreign languages is to have the change entering the good comany over the world.
Secondly, we can enjoy the other cultures more easily by using foreign language. It is not to find that By using the other country's language, we can learn the other cultures easily. 외국어의 장점에서 나아가 '그러므로 학생들은 3년간 외국어를 의무적으로 배워야 한다'라는 결론으로 이어질 수 있어야 합니다. 단순히 외국어를 배우면 다른 문화를 즐길 수 있다는 설명만으로는 부족하겠지요. '학생들에게' 외국어 학습이 필요하다는 점을 더 잘 appeal할 수 있도록 내용을 보완해주세요. 여러 문화를 접하고 익힘으로써 시야를 넓히는 것이 학생들에게 중요한데, 이에 외국어 학습이 도움이 된다, 하는 식으로도 생각해볼 수 있고요. I usually enjoy going to treavel over the world. When I visited London, England, London last year, I could find new lots of new information by myself and I didn't need to hire my assistant such as tour guide. To learn the foreign foreing language can give us more advantages to enjoy the other countries's culture and to learn other cultures more easily because we can access acess to other culture directly by using a forign language.
In conclusion, I agree to require students to learn laern a forien language for in high school. I think that the high school has the good meaning to prepare the future for the students. The Learning foreign language is very important for their life, espacially for the people livling in the current society. I believe and confirm that to learn a foreign language is the good preparation for getting a better job and enhancing their life.
주요 채점기준 (항목별 5-4-3-2-1점수로 30점 만점 자가채점)
논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task
적절한 설명 appropriate explanation
적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details
일관성, 단계적 구성, 주제와의 연관성 unity, progression, coherence
다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety
적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity
Writing 0–30 score scale
Limited (1–16)
기본적으로 '외국어를 배우면 좋은 점'에 대해 논하고 있기 때문에 논점을 아주 벗어난 내용은 아니지만, 필요성에 대해 강조하는 부분이 더 드러나면 좋을 것 같습니다. 논제에 대한 답변이 될 수 있는 idea로 내용을 구체화하고, 그에 대한 설명도 더 보완해주세요. 문법오류나 오탈자가 많아 전달력이 떨어지는 부분들이 있으니 이 부분도 꼼꼼하게 체크해주시기 바랍니다. 수고 많으셨습니다^^ 화이팅!