In reality, there are many situations that where vicious people are often rewarded and good people are oppressed. So people in our society feel anger about these situations this. They sometimes try to avoid and forget this reality because it is stressful. Therefore, in my opinion, I agree with the statement that TV programs and movies should show that good people win are won and evil people are punished.
To begin with, TV programs and movies should provide a shelter to for people. This is because people are often exhausted by the dismal reality that there are many vicious people who won. As a result, people want to be comforted. If they see the same situation in TV programs and movies, they will be more exhausted and depressed. Therefore, TV programs and movies should comfort them by providing the material that good people are always rewarded and encouraged. According to one survey from Korea Broadcasting System, a drama that has a subjects which shows bad guys who earn more money and achieve their goals easily is less popular among viewers. On the other hand, one that is about good guys who are rewarded and encouraged gained a lot of popularity from people. (완벽한 문장이 아닙니다. On the other hand, 후에 완전한 문장이 와야 합니다. One gained a lot of popularity from people 가 주절인데, that절이 적절하게 삽입된 것 같지가 않아요)
On top of that, if TV programs and movies show that bad guys are win, children will learn that bad way to achieve a goal is attractive. Since children are not mentally matured, they are vulnerable to learn any ideas or behaviors, even bad ones. Therefore, showing winning bad guys is are not helpful to children. One A study conducted by the Seoul National Mental Institution has shown that children in the old days who usually read books a book which is about encouraging good way showed a tendency tend to achieve a goal by good means. However, children today who usually watch TV cartoons or movies which show a vicious way to achieve a goal, tend to get their goals regardless of its means whether it is negative to others or not.
In conclusion, many adults want to be comforted from TV programs or movies to forget the reality which is full of evil and vice things. In addition, children are susceptible to learn from TV or movies. In order to comfort people and teach children a lesson that the good is rewarded TV programs and movies are obliged to show that the good is always beneficial.
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