The lecturer argues that control methods for cane toads do not work. ( for some reasons ~~ 첫 문장이 너무 절단 되어 보입니다. 첫 문장이니 만큼 이러이러한 배경이 있었다. 하고 짚고 넘어가주세요 ) This contradicts the reading passage's claim that there were several ways to control cane toads.
First of all, the lecturer suggests that fences are not good answer to control cane toads. This is because fences cannot be built in river or stream.( 앞문장과 뒷문장이 끊어져 보입니다. 연결고리 가 되는 문장으로 이어주세요 ) Cane toads can move through the water. This casts doubt on the reading passage's claim that fencing blocks cane toads to spread to other regions.
Secondly, the lecturer contends that volunteers are not biologists, so it is hard to train them to distinguish cane toad from native frog. This goes against the reading passage's claim that it is one method that encourages local volunteers to catch and destroy the toads.(good )
Lastly, the lecturer points out that virus which have engineered can control cane toads, but can destroy ecology also. This refutes the reading passage's claim that virus which have engineered can decrease the cane toad population.
주요 채점기준 (항목별 5-4-3-2-1점수로 30점 만점 자가채점)
논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task
적절한 설명 appropriate explanation
적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details
일관성, 단계적 구성, 주제와의 연관성 unity, progression, coherence
다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety
적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity
Writing 0–30 score scale
Fair-Good (20–24)
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