Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Rading a book for the second time is more interesting than reading a book for the first time. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Some people presume that reading the same books two times is more interesting than reading them it only once. However, I firmly believe that it is not interesting and also a waste of time and energy because we already know storyline and end up skimming.
To begin with, reading the same book again enables people to feel it boring. This is attributed to the fact that when people read a book for the second time, they already know what how the story goes on and what the ending is like. Such previous knowledge only helps help with decreasing decrease the level of expectation of readers, resulting in feeling bored it boring. 이미 내용을 알기 때문에 지루하다는 point를 잘 설명한 부분입니다. 단계적인 구성도 적절합니다. For example, when I was in fifth grade, my father gave me a book called 'a little prince.' The story of book was is about a boy who is from another planet and it was a fairly exciting book. However, my teacher required us to read the book, assigning us to hand out a description of our impressions. It was hard time to read the book again because I had already known know all the storyline and the sad ending. Then, I felt it was tedious even if reading it for the first time was exciting and interesting. This implies that reading the same book again is not intersting on account of having no expectation resulting from knowing the storyline. 적절한 내용의 사례입니다. 주장을 예증하기에 필요한 요소들을 잘 풀어낸 문단입니다^^
In addition, reading a book two times time makes people skim, not concentrating on story. This is due to the fact that as I explained above, knowing a storyline in advance, people are unlikely to read thoroughly. In case of this, they tend to skim and read at a rapid pace. Such a way of reading is not related to one that makes them interesting. 집중하지 않고 보게 되는 것의 단점을 지적해서 같은 책을 두 번 읽는 것이 재미없고 불필요하다는 점을 강조할 수 있도록 서론에서 설명한 내용처럼 <어차피 집중해서 읽지 않으므로 시간과 에너지 낭비다>, 하는 식의 문장을 덧붙이는 것도 좋겠습니다. According to the Ministry of Education of Korea in 2009, there was a huge difference between two groups of children in the level of satisfaction when they were reading. Children in group A were allowed to read a book once and those in group B were required to read the same book twice. The researchers showed that the former group felt the book was more interesting than the latter group because those in group A were reading and concentrating on book because they did know what it is going on later. This implies that skiming the same book again without concentration let people feel it reading it again boring and exhausting to read the book again. 연구결과 형태로 가공해서 예증 자료를 제시한 부분도 좋습니다.
In brief, reading a book for the first time is much more entertaining because readers can easily focus on the contents of the books, not feeling bored boring.
논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task
적절한 설명 appropriate explanation
적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details
일관성, 단계적 구성 unity, progression, coherence
다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety
적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity
여섯가지 항목의 채점 기준에서 살펴본다면 전반적으로 논리적 흐름이나 적절한 사례 사용 면에서 잘 쓴 글이라고 할 수 있습니다. 충분히 good level 받으실 수 있을 거예요^^ 논지를 강화할 수 있도록 연결고리 부분에서 단어 수준으로 내용을 보강하는 것도 좋을 것 같습니다. 문법오류가 종종 있으니 마지막에 글 구성과 문법오류 체크할 수 있는 시간 여유 남길 수 있도록 시간조절하면서 다양한 주제로 연습해주세요. 수고 많으셨습니다^^ 화이팅!
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