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Some argue
that the extended family is not as important as it used to be because people’s lifestyle
has changed according to development of urban city, which small-sized family is
more adaptable. However, in my opinion, there should be more emphasis on the
big family in contemporary society. That is, children can improve their social
skills from the youth in the extended family and people feel much happier and
have more of sense of security.
To begin
with, the extended family provides much better environment for children to
develop their social skills. That is, from the very early age, children get to
build relationships with different types of people including grandparents,
uncles, aunties, and nephews. Such family members are belong to different age
groups and each relationship is different and unique from each other.
Therefore, children naturally learn how to communicate with the younger, older,
male, or female, developing communication skills dealing with various types of
people which they will encounter in the society. Such skills are essential part
of life for children to live harmoniously. For example, my friend Min-young was
born in the extended family which includes many family members. Her personality
is always outgoing, very sociable and popular among friends. I believe such character
of her comes from her background having extended family.
On top of
that, people who grew up in extended family tend to be much happier and feel
sense of security more than those people who grew up in the nuclear family. To
elaborate, people who belong to the big family have surroundings which they can
always get support from. If one is in difficult situation and experiencing hard
times in life, he or she can discuss with family members. Since there are many
family members who went through many things in life, one can get useful advices
from them and overcome difficulties easily. Moreover, family members will not
only support physically but also mentally. They will provide emotional support
and assistance which would lead to sense of security and comfort. Such comfort
is very important living in the stressful contemporary society. Therefore, it
is understatement that extended family is less important now than in the past. It
is as equally important now as it was in the past.
To wrap up,
it is obvious that extended family is as crucial as in the past now because it
offers better environment for children to improve social skills, and it
provides sense of security and comfort to people. In this regard, I completely
agree with the statement.
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