▶ Your Answer : As the world continues to undergo economic recess, the number of people who want to make a lot of money easily and fast by luck is increasing. They argue that there is nothing much betterthan success with their luck becasue they do not have to go through difficult hardships. However, I strongly believe that people can have a successful life not by their chances but by their hardwork since they can develop necessary factors for success and hard work coincides with the true meaning of success.
First of all, if people do their best, they are able to cultivate factors that are required to be successful in their lives. This is because if they try to achieve their dreams and goals, they become more diligent and learn important knowledge and skills, which would lead to success. For instance, when I stuied for a math test in high school, my friend did not spend much time with preparing for the teset. She told me that I did not have to study that hard because the exam was a O/X type exam and we had 50 percent of chance to correct answers. I did not want to risk that chance so I kept striving to understand the topic better and memorizing important fomulas. Eventually, while I received good grades on the Finals, my friend poorly graded because she could not apply formulas to questions and her marking was not a correct answer.
Second, people who earned great rewards for their efforts are considered as successful people. That is, the true meaning of success is gaining the successful result by doing on one's own. Gaining the good outcome by chance are not considered as a real success. According to a recent study, people generally do not think of the lottery winners as like the ones who succedd through hardships and efforts in their life. In other words, although it is true that people envy for their sudden big fortune, they do not recognize winning the lottery has to do with success since the winners did not earn by doing on their own. Rather they tend to see those who always stake their life on just luck pathetic and hopeless. Conseequently, gaining without hard work is not recognized as a true success.
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