■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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▶ Topic : Students are influenced more by their friends than by their teachers. | |
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▶ Your Answer :
Students will be the leaders of our future. In order to make competence leaders, students have to get influenced in a positive way. To do this, we first have to know what influences the students most. Some people say that students are influenced by teachers more than their friends. However, I think friends are the ones who can change the students.
To begin with, students spend most of the time with their friends than their teachers. The difference between the time spent with the teachers and the friends are significant. To be specific, while we only spend time with teachers only in school, we meet friends not only in the school but also outside of the school. Teenage students usually hang out with friends during the weekend eventhough they meet each other during the whole week in school. This difference will led to the influence one may get. It is natural to get influenced by someone who you spend most time with. Thus, it is evident that students will most likely change by how their friends are. For example, my younger sister, Jane is an eighteen year old girl. She has a best friend in her class whose name is Mary. They met together the first time last year when they became 11th grade. They always hang out together after school as well as inside the school. However, I felt some difference with Jane after she hanged out with Mary. Before meeting Mary, my sister was a very shy girl. She did not seem to have any confidence. However after being friend with Mary, who is very confident and outgoing, Jane became like Mary too. I was so surprised when my sister first talked to the stranger to ask for the way, which she had a hard time doing it before. Through looking at my sister's change, I realized that friends are the ones who can change the student alot.
On top of that, students feel more conncected with their friends than the teachers. Similarities are very important in order to get influenced by the other. Because friends usually have same age, environment, mmindset and many other factors, they become more closer. On the other hand, teachers and students, their age are different. Therefore, times when they cannot understand each other come when they talk together. Most importantly, students tend to listen to people who understands them better which proves the reason why students tend not to listen to their teachers or parents. For instance, when I was in high school, I did not like to talk with adults because I thought they did not understand me. However, my friends seemed to understand me and thus I usually spent my time with my friends. Because I usually spent my day with my friends, most of my personalities, clothes styles, hair styles were all influenced by them. Being an adult now, I still get influenced by people who have common points with me. Therefore sameness greatly help students to listen to each other and get influenced which exists more between the peers than between the relationship between the students and the teachers.
The feeling of conncection with friends and absolute more time spent with friends than the teachers shows that friends influence more than teachers. | |
질문이 있는데요...
이 질문에서 students 라 하면은 주로 teenagers 인지 아니면 그냥 모든 학생인건지 확실하지가 않아서요 ㅠㅠ
처음에 이 질문을 딱 받았을 때는 당연히 teenagers 이라고 생각했는데 쓰다보니 또 어른인 student 도 있지 않을까 하는 생각도 드네요 ㅠㅠ 어떻게 되는거죠?
또 제 에쎄이에서 conclusion이 좀 짧은 것 같은데 조금 늘릴수 있는 방법은 없을까용? ㅠㅠ
도와주세요! ㅠㅠ 감사합니다~!