■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :Do you
agree or disagree with the following statement? Companies should be allowed to
directly advertise to children under the age of five. Use specific reasons and
examples to support your opinion. |
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▶ Your Answer :Some people think that companies should be
allowed to directly advertise to young children. However, in my opinion,
companies should not be allowed to promote to children under the age of five.
There are two reasons. First, advertisers are not concerned about children’s
health. Second, ads make children want things they don’t need.
To begin with, advertisers are not worried
about children’s health. Due to the fact that they only interested in profit
and will sell things that are unhealthy. It makes bad effects for children. A
recent study showed that 88 percent of children affected ads. According to the
study, the reason is that junk food ads make up two-thirds of all food ads. It means
that children can be exposed a lot of ads about junk food. This makes children
to have preference for bad foods like hamburger and so on. Consequently, young
children have bad health status.
On top of that, advertisements make
children want unnecessary things. Children lack good judgment and are easily
affected by ads. Advertisers catch the point that I mentioned above. Take the
example of my youngest brother. My youngest brother asks for a new toy whenever
he sees an interesting advertisement. As my view point, Even if he already has
many toys, he want a new toy. One day, my family
went out to shop several things. When we entered a toy section, my brother said
that he wanted a new toy car whose he saw on Television ads. My mother and
father just ignore him, and me too. After few minutes, he stopped the behavior
that had done previous. This shows ads have a negative effect to children.
To sum up, advertisers are not concerned
about children’s health and ads make children want things they do not need. In
this regard, I firmly believe that advertisement should not be allowed to
children under age of five. |
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첨삭 해주셔서 항상 감사드립니다.^^ 예상점수 대충 알려주시면 감사하겠습니다.