■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic :It is better to go on a trip by oneself than to
take a group tour with a guide. |
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▶ Your Answer :There are some people who (관계대명사 용법 숙지) say that it is better to go on a trip alone that to take a group tour with a
guide. But (but 뒤에는 컴마가 올 수 없습니다) in my opinion, I think taking a group tour with a guide is much
more beneficial.
This is because taking a group tour helps people save a lot
of time, energy and money.
To begin with, taking a group tour with a guide can save much
time and energy. This is because a guide knows about locals very well, so
people who are attending a group tour do not (줄임말 사용을 하지 말아주세요.) need to worry about possible
difficulties that might happen when traveling alone. And it eventually allows
physically weak people to enjoy the trip fully by saving energy.
To illustrate, I will collaborate this with my personal
experience. Last summer, I went to Italy with my whole family including my
grandparents. So before the trip, I was quite worried because my grandparents
are physically weak so they might not fully enjoy the trip. But as the guide
knew the specific direction and the group tour used the bus while moving from (전치사 필요합니다) a
place to place, my grandparents could rest on the bus and it helped (시제 -> 과거 시제로 통일해주세요) them to save their
energy.
On top of that, a group tour with a guide is cost-efficient.
This is because the tour companies get a discount by collaborating with other
local companies by promoting their products during the tour. Furthermore, they
usually use their own bus while traveling. (새로운 문장으로 시작해주세요) it help them to save transportation
expense, and also let them use a hotel that is far away from the core of the
city, which makes its accommodation fee much cheaper. So when I was traveling
in Italy, I could travel much cheaper than my friend who traveled alone without
a tour company.
In conclusion, traveling as a group with a guide helps people
to save a lot of time and energy and it is also very cost-effective. For these
reasons, I think taking a group tour is much better. |
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. conclusion의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
3. formal essay를 작성할 때에 있어서 지켜야 하는 writing rule에 대해
잘 모르고 계신 듯 합니다. (절대 나쁜 것은 아닙니다!)
줄임말, 아라비아숫자, but 뒤에 컴마, and으로 문장 시작하는 것 모두가
이러한 공식적인 쓰기 활동에서는 쓰면 안되는 것으로 여겨지고 있습니다.
참고해주세요!
수고하셨습니다. *^^*