■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. |
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▶ Your Answer :
There has always
been debates over whether technology has given numerous advantages on children's
education or not. Some people believe that it lessened the children's
creativity due to its convenience of accessing to information. However, in my
opinion, (대소문자 구분) technology has made children more creative that the past for the
following two reasons.
To begin with, technology gives
children more chances to be more indigenous. Thanks to the technical
improvement, they can make use of a myriad of resources in online domain. The
Internet enabled children to download whatever they want in straightforward
ways and they can invent their own novel ideas by benchmarking or sculpting information.
To be specific, my brother's elementary school remodeled all of its classroom
to be equipped with individual computer with online connected. The main purpose
of this new construction was to reinforce children's imagination The
school dean mentioned that its students can take advantage of the Internet to
collect numerous data and develop their own thesis and they will eventually
escalate the degree of their creativity. (결과가 없습니다. 그래서 어떻게 되었나요?)
On top of that, technology
provides children with broader range of experience, stimulating their imagination. In the past, children's options were limited to a few media
such as reading books or playing in the ground. However, the advent of
innovative mechanics offers dynamic activities to the young student and they
can become more imaginative people. For instance, many young students are able
to experience foreign culture with several applications on their smartphones.
Those social network services make connections between users from all around
world and they can exchange their opinions. It acts positively on children's
education by instilling numerous logics (what kind of logics? 그리고 친구를 만날 때 왜 imagination이 필요한지 서술해주세요) in their mind.
To sum up, the technical
breakthrough is one of the sources of children's creativity since it has a host
of references for them to devise their own thinking. Also, wider scope of experience which came from the technology strengthens children's inventiveness. In this regard,
I firmly believe that technical evolution has encouraged children to be more
creative than before.
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1. 내용에서 보완할 점이 많이 보입니다. 최대한 설득력 있게 서술해주세요.
2. 상상력은 그냥 imagination으로 쓰시면 됩니다!
그리고 첫 번째 두 번째 모두 imagination을 언급하고 있기에
비슷하게 느껴질 수 있습니다.
확실하게 차별화해주세요!
수고하셨습니다. *^^*