■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Today, people only do a few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. |
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▶ Your Answer :
It is often said that today, people only do
a few things well. However, in my opinion, contemporary people can do many
things. There are two reasons. One reason is that as time goes by, many
companies need (주어 동사 불일치) people having various abilities. Another reason is that people
get well-rounded education.
To
begin with, many companies demand people to become a man who can do many
things well recently because The Fourth Industry Revolution is related with
convergence of things (너무 추상적입니다). As the demand is increasing, the means of success has
changed completely compared to the past. In the past, it was merely focusing on
one’s own way. Thus, nowadays people begin to study other fields which is not
their major. For example, there was a survey conducted by a group of society
majors with 200 employees of design company as respondents. The purpose of survey
was to understand their thoughts about the way to success. The majority of
respondents replied that diverse abilities are really needed for success. They
also added that they have made an effort for it by studying other fields like computer
science. (이것은 많은 것을 알아야/배워야 하는 이유에 가깝습니다. 사람들이 많은 것을 아는 이유에 대해 서술해주세요.)
On
the top of that, people get education of various areas. Students are required
to take several different courses at least 7 courses. I will take my personal
experience as an example. When I was in a high school, I was good at math and
science. However, I had to take not only math and science but also take two
languages, history and music for graduating the school. I hated those classes
because it was challenging to me. But come to think of it, it made (어떤 것을 도왔고 어떤 상황에서 감사한지 구체적으로 서술해주세요) me do well
in other things, not only science and math, and now I am really thankful for
that because it helps me at many situations.
To
sum up, the demands of companies and the education of schools make people be skilled many areas. In this regard, I believe that people do many things, not a few
things well for the reasons I mentioned above.
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