*진하게 표시한 부분은 제가 파악한 문단의 주요 내용이니 참고하세요^^
In the lecture, the speaker contends that forcing students to do community service is not only good for nurturing good citizen, but also is and gives a valuable experience. This contradicts the reading passage's points that forcing students to do community service has a few drawbacks.
Firstly, the reading passage's point is that there might be a student who won't serve community service fairly, since there is no way to gauge if a student has worked fairly. However, the lecturer asserts that every school schools has have their own community service programs and criteria for assessing students' work accurately and fairly, therefore there is no need to worry. 애매한 평가기준을 중심으로 대립되는 내용이 잘 정리된 문단입니다.
Secondly, the lecturer suggests that even a compulsory community service might affect students to have a distorted view about community service, it still can inspire a lot of students. The lecturer gives an example of examples a student who worked in a hospital and made his mind to become a doctor. This refutes the reading passage's assumption that forcing students to do the community service might mislead them. 왜 학생들을 mislead한다는 것인지 reading passage의 detail을 좀 더 보완해준다면 좋겠습니다.
Lastly, the lecturer counters the reading passage's opinion that forcing students to do the community service is a infringement abusement of student's right. However, the lecturer says that if schools demand students to do all the homework homeworks and projects, why forcing students to serve the community service is wrong thing? 이미 결론을 내린 각 지문들의 내용을 정리하는 부분이므로 의문문을 사용해서 독자에게 질문을 던지는 형태는 적절하지 않습니다. 왜 학생에게 봉사활동을 시키는 것이 권리침해가 아닌지에 대한 detail을 풀어서 설명해주세요. In addition to that, the lecturer points out that it can also be a part of procedure of the school. This counters the reading passage that forcing student to do a community service is illicit.
전반적으로 각 지문의 내용에 따라 필요한 요소들은 어느정도 갖추고 있지만 이를 설명으로 풀어낼 때 필요한 요소들이 빠져 있는 것 같아요. 내용을 요약하는 데 꼭 필요한 detail들만 추려서 요약할 수 있도록 불필요한 사족들을 제거하고 보완해야 할 detail들을 재검토하셔서 improve해주세요^^ 답안과 비교하셔서 어떤 부분에서 노트테이킹이 빠졌는지, 잘못 이해된 부분은 없는지 한 번 더 체크하시기 바랍니다. 수고 많으셨습니다^^화이팅!