*진하게 표시한 부분은 제가 파악한 문단의 주요 내용이니 참고하세요^^
The lecturer contends that the theories that explain why the ancient Egypt Kingdom has have collapsed have inherent flaws. This contradicts the reading passage's suggestion of theories that explains why the ancient Egypt has have disintegrated.
To start with, the lecturer argues that provincial governers would not have not revolted against Pharaos because they were very priviliged and they were loyal to King. In addition to this, the lecturer also points out that the central government had a very strong army, which was capable of settling all the turmoils caused by provincial governors. This casts doubt on reading passage's assumtion that provincial governors' rebel against Pharao is the reason why the ancient Egypt has have collapsed. 지방세력들의 반란을 중심으로 대립되는 두 지문의 내용이 잘 정리되어 있습니다. lecture의 반박내용에 필요한 detail들을 잘 언급하신 것 같아요.
Secondly, the lecturer suggests that historic document that was recorded by the Egypt's chronicler was minsinterpreted. The correct interpreting indicates that the drought had occurred only in east region of the Egypt, causing only local damage. This counts the reading passage's theory that the reduction of Nile river floods resulting drought of whole domain is the reason for disintegration of the Egypt Kingdom. 가뭄과 관련한 대립되는 두 지문의 입장이 잘 정리된 문단입니다.
Lastly, the lecturer argues that the fight between Pepi's siblings sibling can't be the reason why the ancient Egypt have collapsed. This is because the turmoils over deciding who is the successor of the king had been always existed exists along the reign of other pharaos, indicating that the Egypt did not don't collapse just because of some fight between siblings. And the lecturer also points out that part of the role of central government's army was to settle the fight among siblings. This refutes the reading passage's saying that fight over deciding who is the successor of the king was the reason why the ancient Egypt has have collapsed. 왕족들 간의 세력다툼을 이집트붕괴 이유로 보는 reading의 관점과 그에 대한 lecture의 반박내용이 적절하게 요약되어 있습니다. 같은 단어를 반복적으로 사용하는 대신 같은 뜻의 다른 단어를 활용하거나 표현을 다양하게 해서 문법활용도를 보여주는 것도 좋겠습니다.
전반적으로 두 지문의 대립되는 주장들이 일목요연하게 잘 정리되어 있습니다. 글을 제출하기 전에 문법오류나 단어 활용 등을 체크할 수 있도록 시간 여유 남기면서 연습해주세요. 문제지의 답안과 직접 확인하셔서 노트테이킹에서 빠진 부분이나 잘못 이해된 부분은 없는지 다시 한 번 내용 체크해주시기 바랍니다. 수고 많으셨습니다^^화이팅!