▶ Your Answer : Sometimes we regret our decision. Sometimes we give up the things we have wished for a long time. Sometimes we realize the life will hit us hard in the face. If then, we need a warm place full of love to be embraced or understood. And only a house, family, can serve that role. Oliver Goldsmith said, “no matter how hard we tried or difficult to find out the whereabouts of our place, our faded hope comes back home for peace.”And yes, it’s definitely true. No matter a house is divided itself, it can stand itself day by day and one by one from our love. And my story starts with three turning points happened in my life. The first turning point is about reliance. My dad, very gentle with us always, once made a mistake when I was 14 years old. I remember what happened at that time though I was very young. My dad became intoxicated and was being quite rude to my mom one night. He began to hit mom without acknowledging the strength. My mom fell in a faint and was taken away in an ambulance. I was in a state of shock for a while, pretty long. And this has changed the attitude toward my dad. I avoided my dad and the friendly relationship went away. I believed the memory I have had with my dad were all false and tried to ignore them. However, as time passes by, many attempts were there to make the relationship better by having conversation with dad, trying to understand each other. Soon, heavy trust began to form from the very bottom of our relationship. Dad wanted to understand me, and I also tried to find out what dad is going to say. After a lot of talks, I finally could understand dad was not mean to hit mom so hard, and dad is regretting. Family is not formed as slick as nothing at all. Family ties knitted by bonds of blood and mutual love let us understand and believe each other. Second turning point is about belief. The belief of all family is the one. The belief of family will go on forever and forever. The belief which will not be faded away exists strong in our mind. For example, I was once forced into a corner of the suspect of the robbery. I was so young and frightened, not knowing what to do. I tried to say hard that I am not the suspect. But adults, at that time, didn’t hear my words and called me to account. Soon my family heard what is happening around me and hurried to me. Mom said, “My daughter is not the suspect. She is too young to know such things. And she is a kind, lovely girl. You guys are making a mistake.” I was so touched by her words and cried a lot in front of her. No adults believed my words but only my family. The belief is as hard as a rock, as powerful as a sun. The third and last turning point is about love. Love is powerful. Love is patiently answering all those questions. And Love is a relationship built on a firm foundation. I believe house is not divided itself one of a sudden. There may be a lot of causes or many other threatening barriers. And I also believe we can ward off obstacles via love. 제발 첨삭 한 번만 해 주세요.ㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠ 첨삭 아니면 내용이 좋은지 나쁜지만 알려주시면 감사하겠습니다. |