■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
▶ Topic : Hackers writing p130-131: Merits of using coal as an energy resource
▶ Your Answer :
In the reading passage, there is ample support for the author’s claim that coal is advantageous to use as an energy resource. There are three explanations; easy mining, cheap shipping cost, creating numerous jobs. However, the professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuttal to the reading passage’s point.
First, the professor contends that there are complex processes at coal excavating. Though it is true that coal usually
locate locates (coal는 단수 주어 입니다) near the surface, it is limited and almost exhausted. Therefore to use it consistently, we need special technology to burrow deeper than now. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim that coal mining is convenient because its closeness to the land, thus the human des not need some developed equipments. where there is no need to develop
Next, the professor insists that transporting coal can be more costly than other fuels. Coal is very heavy and bulky, people have to go back and forth several times to use it as energy source. This refutes the reading passage’s assertion that it is less expensive than other dangerous fuels since it doesn’t does not (독립형 에세이에서는 줄인말을 서술하면 안됩니다) have the possibility of explosion.
Finally, the professor argue argues (professor는 단수 주어 입니다) that coal industry does not create new jobs. In these days, most coal mining companies struggling struggle (동사가 없습니다) to develop labor-saving techniques so they can reduce the labor cost. Through these efforts, a lot of workers are replaced to mechanized systems. This tendency may eventually cause the declination of jobs. This counters the reading passage’s suggestion that coal industry will create a tremendous amount jobs thus contribute to hire lots of job seekers.
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리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족한 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에 잇어서는 리딩에 대한 부분이 각 단락에서 한 문장으로만 서술하였습니다. 한 문장으로 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.