▶ Your Answer : There has been argument whether television should be watched for education or just entertainment. As for my position, I believe it is better for people to use television for fun. The rationale behind this is that television gives people to get stressed out and opportunity to get along with people for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, television makes me get rid of stress. I'm aware that it is not the only way of eliminating stress, however, in my opinion, it is one of the most convenient way of doing so. Let me give you example related to my experience, When I finished my final examination and was exhausted to it, I decided to watch some comic dramas on television. Although the drama had no certain content and lesson, I fully enjoyed it by laughing. If had not watched drama on television, I wouldn't have been pleasant to some large extent.
On top of that, watching television is also used to get along with people. Of course, I don't completely ignore the merits of comfort and availability in terms of education of television. However, it is also true that television helps people to interact with well. For example, when I was first day in middle school, there were no friends that I had known before. So, the way I chose of communicating with classmates is to inquire what programs they watched recently and watch together at my home. The effect was tremendous since we enjoyed the TV programs. I could make a lot of friends. This example illustrates well that television is useful to get along with people.
Taking all of these things into account, I firmly believe that television should be used to entertain when it comes to erasing stress and getting along with people.
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