Some people believe that studying by alone is better than studying with others, while other people think differently. However, if I were asked to choose, I would say that studying with other people as a group is better than studying solitarily for the two following reasons.
To begin with, people can far more efficiently study, when they study together with others. (빼도 될 것 같습니다.) People's ability is quite limited and weak when they are alone, but when they cooperate with other people they are able to enhance efficiency and reduce time spent to finish a task. It is applied when we study as well. Hence, if people study together with other people, they would obtain a better outcome than people who study by alone. For example, when I was a primary school student, my statement was affirmed because people studying with others actually got better scores at school than others who studied by themselves. To be more specific, when I was a fifth-grade student at school, my school gathered students willing to study with others as a group, and I joined into them. Every day, me and my friends and I who joined the same program with me shared many much instructive information for our test and complemented each other's weak part. After 30 days from a start of the program, there was a mid-term test and an average score of the students, who joined the same program with me, was surprisingly higher than overall student's, who did not join. If I did not join the program, I wouldn't get that high score at the test.
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