There is are a lot of controversies exist over the best way to relax and reduce stress. Some say when you are stressed out, hanging out with friends is the best way to reduce reducing stress. However, I think the best way to reduce reducing stress and relax relaxing is spending time alone. This is because I think that being alone will give you time to calm down, and because when you are stressed out, you get cranky, which hurt other people emotionally.
To start with, I think that spending time alone can help you calm down. This is because being alone equals being away from all the hassles around you. When you get frustrated because of your boss or colleagues or severe competition, you will be fed up with all the things all around you, and want to be wanting to give up. But if you spend time alone, in placid mode, you will have enough time to see things more clearly and become more rational person. For example, I sit on my chair when something goes went wrong or when I'm frustrated for some vulgar happenings. While I'm sitting on my chair quietly, I can think peacefully about what went wrong, and whose fault it is is it. This helps me to boost my energy.
Secondly, I think being alone can prevent you from hurting others someone else or emotionally provoked by them someone else. This is because when you are stressed out you will get more vulnerable (다른 단어를 사용하는 게 좋을 것 같아요. 예를 들면 irritated 이런 단어들로요. Vulnerable 뒤에는 어떤것에 영항이 잘 미치는지를 써 주셔야 해요), more cranky and more aggressive state of mind. Therefore being alone can protect you from other people's judgments and also protect others from your crankiness. For example, a study that was conducted by Yale University, which indicates that stressed out and frustrated people hurts other people around them emotionally. This sometimes results disintegration of friendships, families, or other relationships.
In summary, I think spending time alone is good for reducing stress and relaxing, because being alone can help you calm down, and prevents unwanted situations like disintegration of in relationships. All in all, these are the reasons why I think spending some time alone is good for relieving stress and relax.
전반적으로 문장구성이 좀 단조로운 것 같아요. This is because 라고 시작되는 문장이 많은데 이런 표현은 토플 에세이를 쓸 때 많이 쓰는 건 안좋아요. Informal 하기 때문이에요. 그리고 내용적으로 봤을 때 두번째 이유가 잘 support 되는 것 같지 않아요. 스트레스를 받으면 성격이 안좋아지기도 한다는 말을 한 뒤에 protect you from other people’s judgments 라고 있는데 이 부분이 갑자기 튀어나온 것 같아요. 다른 내용과 이어지지 않습니다.