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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic :
It is better to spend one's money on trips than to put it aside for the future. | |
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▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that putting aside money for the future is more beneficial than spending it on trip. However I think spending money on trips is better than depositing money in a bank because it helps students to broaden their outlook and to make many friends.
To begin with, trip plays significant role in broadening students' outlook. This is because they can see gorgeous scenery and feel nature through outdoor activity.
Evidence for this comes from a study by the Korean Department of Education. According to one of their studies, more than 80 percent of students surveyed reported that students who often trip had more broadening outlook than others.
they has relationship with other as well.
Second, it helps to develop social skills because trips help to meet many various people and make a lot of friends. This is important because modern people in Korea live independent life and trip makes them interact with others.
For example, when I traveled to Europe I could meet a lot of people from various country. The memories that I was with them is so special that these sometimes inspire me. Also I keep in touch with them often.
To sum up, trip has positive effect on expanding there outlook and promoting social skill. For these reasons, I strongly believe that expending money on trips is more beneficial than put it aside for the future. | |
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