There have been varying opinions whether watching movies at theater is better than watching them at home or not. Some people argue that watching movies at home is more comfortable. However, I have a different idea. I believe that best place to watch watching movies is theater. This is because, the more professional place we watch, the more impression we will get.
To begin with, it is very general for generally many people to appreciate watching media at professional place. In other words, many people prefer to professional place to when watching movies. There is a great example supporting this idea. I have had an experience that of watching same movie in at different place. One place was professional, another place was my home. Through this experience in different places, I felt that movie theater was more amazing place for watching movies. Also, professional place leads to have many benefits. This These benefits have has positive effect not just on oneself, but also on many other matters such as good mood, realistic sound and big screen. (oneself와 such as 뒤의 list들이 잘 이어지지 않는 것 같아요. 처음에 not only on one’s mind 라고 쓰는 게 좋을 거 같아요)
On top of that, watching movies at home is very boring. Putting it differently, people would be able to lonely and feel solitude. A recent survey from Statistics Commission in United Nations revealed an interesting result. 96 Ninety-six percent of those surveyed, person who watching watched movies at home frequently think that watching movies at home caused decrease intensive (명사품사로 바꿔주세요). This high percentage provides a basis for opinion already mentioned. Also, this outcome is because watching movies at home brings out many detrimental influences include decreasing impression.
Through survey’s result and effect, we can know that watching movies at theater is better. rational behavior.
To conclude, integrating the positive and the negative aspects, I strongly believe that watching movies at theater is better than watching them at home.
Theater 를 professional place라고 표현하는 건 좀 어색한 것 같아요. 다른 표현이나 단어를 찾을 수 있으면 대체하는 게 좋을 것 같아요. 그리고 전반적인 에세이가 좀 의미상 vague 합니다. 애매한 문장들이 많은 것 같아요. 토플 에세이를 쓸 때는 간결하게 의미전달을 제대로 해 주시는 게 좋습니다.