It is said that a friendship is one of the most
fragile relationship between two people. Even though taking action to cope with
mistakes is helpful to friends, people can easily get grudge(d) to this
advice. Nevertheless, I strongly support that people should taking action to deal with friends' mistakes
although a friendship can be broken. The reason behind this is that friends can
be in danger if we let a friend make mistakes. Additionally, a friendship can
be recovered after solving the problems.
To begin with, letting friends make mistakes results
in jeopardizing them for their faults. Friends who make mistakes may not know
the situation they are in or they avoid to look
(looking) at the reality. In this situation,
friends is (are
the) ones who can watch them closely and motivate them to fix the poor
choices. Saving friends has a priority to
(over) destructing
a friendship. For instance, I saw my friend who walked though the
street, not the pedestrian road. I talked to
(told) her how it
is dangerous (it can be), but she did
not like to listen to my advice and warning that it could be reported by (to) policeman.
This is (It
was) the place notorious for many accidents. She never runs across the
street as I made her embarrassed with that. (I don’t
understand this sentence) In the end, my actions can save my friends,
which is the most significant than any other things. (Is
this sentence saying that you saved her?) Likewise, friends should not
be intimidated ahead of friends' perilous situation. (I
see the point, but introducing a different point can be dangerous for the
composition.)
Furthermore, a friendship is recoverable after friends
fix their mistakes follewed by friends' action.
Rather, if friends leave their friends into the
trouble situation, the friend no longer
continue their friendships since they do not have chance to (take) care (of) themselves.
An old saying appeals that 'a friendship become more
stronger after a hardship they should
endure together.' After that, they can build trustness
each other and share their experiences
as valuable memories. According to the research conducted by National
Psychology Institute, people feel more intimacy(te) to others who can correct their wrong doings and
want to be (closer) friends more. It was highlighted because it was
opposite to the common sense that people do not want to allow others to blame
or teach them even though they say right things. (Clarify
who is doing what. This is confusion of subject) As this case shows,
taking action to friends' mistakes will not destroy a friendship, (but) rather make it profound.
(The essay started fine, but from the end of
the first supporting paragraph, the grammar and sentence composition just gets less
complete. Concentrate on writing comprehendible sentences even though you
realize that you’re running out of time. Also, check your spelling!)
In a nutshell, I have no dount that people do anything to stop friends' mistake even though it could be risky about a friendship. If concerning about cracking in a friendship, friedns can be endangered. What's more, a friendship can be rebuilded after they fix the problem that friends make.