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The reading passage covers three major points concerning deep-sea mining near volcanic vents. According to the reading passage, deep-sea mining near volcanic vents is a good idea. The listening, which is of the same topic, clearly argues why they are debatable. By the lecture, deep-sea mining near volcanic vents is not a promising prospect from three points clearly different from the points which is made by the reading passage.
First point made in the reading passage is that there are a lot of extractable metal deposits in the deep sea. The lecturer, on the contrary, gives an opposite idea on this point. He says that we have no technology for mining and transportation metals from now. It’s why we can not extract the pure metal from the dirty matters of deposit. On the current science and technological system, we cannot extract what we want to get and move them to where they are needed. 우리가 필요한 많은 자원이 묻혀 있어 promising하다는 주장과 그에 반박하는 '채굴과 운송 기술의 부족'이 잘 연결되어 있습니다. 적절하게 필요한 detail들도 잘 정리하신 것 같아요.
Also, by the reading passage, mining of the resources without harming the environment is possible. Again, the lecturer 쉼표삭제 maintains that it is not true by the fact that mining at a distance of two kilometers is not deep enough to keep the biological system around volcanic vents safe. If we start mining near there, the water would be contaminated during its work process and this situation would destroy the ecological cycle around volcanic vents. 환경(생태계)파괴와 관련해 대립되는 주장이 잘 정리되어 있습니다. 2km가 충분한 거리가 되지 못한다는 점을 잘 강조해주신 것 같아요. 이 부분에서 mining과정에서 나오는 오염물질이 퍼지기 쉬운 거리라는 점(spread)를 강조해주는 것도 좋겠습니다.
The last point made by the reading concerning the reason why the deep sea mining is promising is that mining in the deep-sea is not dangerous work. It’s because it should be practiced depending on the international law. There is the International Seabed Authority(ISA) which is founded in 1994 so that 언제 ISA가 세워졌는지에 대한 정보는 불필요한 detail입니다. deep sea mining에 대해 옹호하는/반대하는 직접적인 detail들만 정리해주세요. the process of mining in the deep-sea around volcanic vents should observe that law. However, the lecturer clearly contradicts contradict with this opinion by the fact that where the mining will be practiced is not included in the international area so that it has nothing to do with the regulation of the ISA. It’s because the location of mining would be in the national water territory or individual water territory such as private island. international area에 포함되지 않는다는 점을 설명하는 앞 문장에 간단하게 키워드만 포함해서 합쳐주는 것도 좋을 것 같아요. 사유지이거나 국가 개인의 영역이라 국내법이 적용된다는 점을 catch한 것은 좋습니다. Therefore, he says that it would be just wishable thing that mining in the deep-sea were below the supervision of the ISA. 마찬가지로 '이것은 희망사항일 뿐이다'하는 식의 내용들은 크게 필요한 detail이 아니지요.
Writing 0–30 score scale
Good (24–27)
전반적으로 대립되는 point나 필요한 내용들이 잘 정리되어 있습니다. '간결한' 요약문을 구성하는 것이 목적이므로 꼭 필요하지 않은 detail들이 포함되지 않도록 유의해주세요. 계속해서 시간 조절 하시면서 다양한 문제로 연습해보시면 좋을 것 같습니다^^ 수고 많으셨습니다. 화이팅!