There have been varying opinions (on) whether a teacher who is serious and strict is
more effective a teacher (than) who uses
humor and (is) easygoing. Some people argue that
teaching through funny joke and friendly(ness)
is effective. However, I have a different idea. I believe that rigid and rigorous(ness)
is (the) most effectively method to
(of) teaching. This is because the more strict
teachers do (are),
the more students will follow well.
To begin with, It (Clarify what ‘it’ is.) is effective for students to
participate if class intensively and improve score. There
is a great example supporting this idea. I have a teacher who try(ies) more (to be) rigid for
(to) students. As a result, students improve
attitude and test score. This teacher’s acting leads to many profits (benefits =
profit is money-related). This profits
have positive effects not just on one self,
but also on many other matters such as intensive classes and
improve students(‘) test score. (Do not repeat the same point using different sentence. Repetitiveness
should be avoided at all times.) For this reason, severe teacher (is) needs(ed) for student.
On top of that, If teacher is not
rigorous, School would not be able to found regulations. Putting it differently, rigorous(ness) is most important things in a group life. (When
using ‘putting it differently’, the concepts that come before and after the
connection should have a strong relationship. They don’t.) A recent
survey from Statistics Commission in United Nations revealed an interesting result:
94 percent of those surveyed, teacher and parent(s),
think that rigid(ity) and strict(ness) is need(ed) for
student. The remaining 11 percent (not 6 percent?)
of the researchers show also not opposed theme
but neutral in the near-positive. (those
surveyed showed mildly approving response. = BUT this doesn’t make sense
because not a single survey shows all-positive or all-negative result. If you
are to lie, lie well.)
(There should be a huge
improvement in grammar before you actually take TOEFL. Also, use uppercase letters
at the beginning of the sentence but not after comma. This is basic. There
should be distinction between nouns and adjectives. You used rigid, rigorous,
and other adjectives as nouns.)
This outcome is because teacher who
uses humor brings detrimental influences include disorder in class and discord
with students. Through survey’s result and that of effects, we can know that
teacher acting more stricter is rational behavior.
To conclude integrating the positive and negative aspects mentioned above, I strongly believe that teacher who is rigid and severe is more effective than a teacher who uses humor and is easygoing.