The lecturer argues that the brain scan lie detector is not better than the conventional polygraphs. This contradicts with the reading passage’s claim that brain scan lie detector is more accurate.
First, the lecturer insists that true statements may be mistakenly classified as dishonest. This is because when a person is withholding information, the same part of the brain activates (목적어) as lying. People often suppress (목적어), indicating (what?) as dishonesty. This counters the reading passage’s claim that true statements are not misidentified as lies.
각 지문에서 어떤 것을 주어로 두고 있는지 정확하게 표현하는 게 좋을 것 같습니다. detector인지, polygraphs인지 정확하게 해 주세요.
Second, the lecturer points out that the interpreting is not done in an
objective way. (detector의 interpreting을 이야기한다는 점을
서술해주셔야 합니다.) Since the
brain function varies from people to people, there is not a no standard brain waves. That
means an expert will be needed, which may cause errors. This refutes the
reading passage’s claim that the results are interpreted in an objective
matter.
Last, the lecturer asserts that it is easier to fool (누구를요?). Performing a complex mental process causes the overall brain activity to increase, which makes a lie. Also, if the person rehearses the answer and retells it, it may indicate the statements as honesty. This casts a doubt on the reading passage’s claim that it is difficult to trick people with brain scan.
Writing 0-30 Score Scale
Limited (10-17)
글쓴이가 주어진 reading과 lecture의 지문 내용을 정확하게 이해 해 주신 것 같습니다. 하지만 글을 쓸 때, 각 지문이 어떤 것에 대해서 어떻게 생각을 하는지 정확하게 표현하지 못하고 있는 것 같아요. 문장을 쓸 때, 문장의 주어가 되는 부분과 목적어가 되는 부분을 clarify해 주는 것이 좋습니다. 글을 읽는 사람이 주어진 지문의 내용을 모른다고 생각하고 기본적인 디테일을 포함해서 글을 써 주시는 게 좋아요.
수고하셨습니다.