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Undoubtedly, a trip plays a huge role in our lives, which allows us to escape one’s repeated life. In general, some people might think that traveling with a companion is beneficial and enjoyable. In my opinion, however, I firmly believe that traveling alone is more satisfied and reasonable for the following two subsequent reasons.
First and foremost, traveling alone enables us to enhance a sense of independence. To be specific, by encountering and solving challenging situations, we can develop our independence. In other words, when facing extreme situations alone in the course of the trip, we should solve the problems such as searching a road for a destination and reservation of their hotels. For instance, there is a poll conducted by the Johns Hopkins University with 300 students majoring in a social philosophy department as respondents. The purpose of the survey is to understand the advantages of traveling alone. The majority of respondents said that people can be trained by traveling alone, getting out of their comfort zone. An overwhelming 89 percent responded that people having such experience tend to have a firm independence as well as can work effectively and plan their future life.
In addition, if people plan to travel alone, they will be able to visit the place they want with their planned schedule. On the other hands, traveling with a companion does not allow us to go to the place I want freely. Specifically, if I travel with my friends, I cannot ignore his opinions, which means that I should visit the place I do not want. For example, last year I planned my first trip to Japan with my colleague. He wanted to focus on historical landmarks but I wanted to experience a wide array of their local food and cutting-edge items. Finally, we got to Japan and went to a Japanese museum, galleries, and old temples. Unfortunately, I could not see any shops that sell local food and items around them. After all, I could not go anywhere I had planned and I returned home without any satisfying. Now that think about it, it was a terrible trip in my life.
In conclusion, taking improving one’s independence and a satisfactory trip into consideration, I definitely believe that traveling alone is more beneficial than with others. Never should we forget that this issue may have a huge impact on our lives.
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